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Choose one of the stories to apply feminist criticism to the reading. Identify the protagonist and antagonist and describe their relationship as it relates to the theme. How does the relationship to the foil, if there is one, reflect the theme? Identify whether the protagonist is round or flat, dynamic or static. Support your response with examples from the text.
 * Chopin’s “Story of and Hour” and Gilman’s “The Yellow Wallpaper”**

In Chopin’s “Story of and Hour”, a woman was crushed by society. Our protagonist in this story is Louis Mallard, she is saddened by her husband’s death but when walks into the room, Louis discovered that he is not dead and dies of a heart attack. The antagonist was the society during her time; she couldn’t stand how she was living. She was always kept in her house and not able to go outside. Louis was a round character, she was sad and happy. Also she was the dynamic character in the story; she is always doing something different.

I think you've done a lovely job of making sure that you have included each part of the question (round/flat, dynamic/static, etc.), and it seems that you know the definition of each of these terms. What is lacking is supporting evidence from the text. You tell me that Louise is a round character because she is sad and happy, but you don't explain what she was said or happy about. I want to feel like you know this story thoroughly, and that you've analyzed it for important meaning.

When you add those examples from the text, you'll be able to organize it in a way that includes an introduction, full body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Every essay exam that you take in this class, should at least have those parts of an essay.

If you have time at the end of an essay, I would like you to go through and eliminate your weak verbs. Use Word to find synonyms that will make your reading more exciting and compelling to read :)

Your sentence fluency shows a good grasp of combining short and long sentences (nice job with the semi-colon), but you need to read everything over before you save to make sure you're not leaving any fragments (" she is saddened by her husband’s death but when walks into the room ...")

In your next essay, make sure your comma goes inside you quotation marks ("Story of an Hour," a woman ...)

I look forward to reading your next essay!

He has her use words that a normal person would not use during her time. Wharton wrote Sly baggase. This tells us that she is southern. Her id said out of anger to pick up and leave to Boston. Her ego said give money to her family when she gets published. Her superego said she sould send the buttons to johns reffer. He has him use nice kind words. Wharton wrote Curus, but weve all got to go, one more time or another. He was a caring person. His id was going in and out of the cold to get away from the smell. His superego was to take his friends body.